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小编:长安 142 上周末的雅思写作考题,是一个积极消极对比的问题,题目较为简单,针对此类问题的文章框架也较为单一。
环球教育杨亮老师为大家分析原题如下:
In many parts of the world, children nowadays are given more freedom than they used to. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? 20170708
面对这种积极和消极对比的问题,考生们一般采用的方法是,用部分主论段来证明其积极的一面。再用剩余的主论段来证明其消极的方面。并且通过让步的方式来说明其消极的方面是可以被解决的,被避免的,或者根本就不重要。以此为逻辑来证明,整体而言这件事是积极的发展。反之亦然。
通常的文章框架是:
开头段:点明题目
主段一:积极的原因一
主段二:积极的原因二
主段三:消极的原因一,加,对此的反驳
结尾段:再次表明立场
反之亦然。
当然,下文并不是这个常见的框架。
In this day and age, some adults like parents and school teachers are more likely to provide children with far more freedom than in the past. Nevertheless, in most cases giving children what they need is not the decision with wisdom.
开头段,在点明题目的同时也阐明了笔者的立场。
Primarily, with being given less surveillance from teachers in school than ever before, children would throw their textbooks away and find out many meaningless ways to get relaxation. Under that circumstance, how many students would finish their homework could be imagined readily. This is to say, academic study of schoolchildren cannot be guaranteed at all. Worse still, pervasiveness of school-bully which might be caused by overmuch freedom to all schoolchildren makes parents doubt whether they should send their kids to school or not.
从在学校的角度出发,如果在学校孩子们被给予更多的自由度,那么后果不敢设想。
Additionally, more freedom given by parents implies less parenting children may gain from them. So sophisticated our world has become, that sometimes chances are that adults might even go astray by being misled by some bad persons or information. There must be a slim chance for children to grow up to be upright persons. Simultaneously, to a great extent those children might be targets of gangs that need new crew, drag dealer who want new clients and kidnappers who see them as leverage.
从在家的角度出发,如果家长给予孩子们更多的自由度,那么后果仍然极其严重。
In a nutshell, there seems to be excessively many potential risks once children are offered more freedom than before both in school and at home. Meanwhile, sufficient guidance and supervision do not mean their will and choices are not respected by adults at all. For being responsible, both parents and educators are supposed to make every effort to find out how to balance the freedom and control for children.
结尾段,重述了立场,并且用后两句表达了一个开放式的结尾。
类似的文章结构并不多见,其实逻辑也同样严谨。在论证一件事情是否积极的时候,只针对其消极的点论述。如果这些消极的点被论证成为事实,那么无论其有多少积极的点,都不足以说明该事情积极。此文的论点集中于学校和生活,因为孩子的主要活动范围也就是这两个地方。