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2017年6月3日雅思高分大作文赏析

2017-06-09

来源:环球教育

小编:长安 84
摘要:

  6月3日雅思考试的作文,仍然是一个老题重现。无论是从话题分类的角度还是提问方式的角度都几乎无任何难度可言。


  环球教育杨亮老师分析原题如下:

  Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 20170603

  就此题而言,相信大部分考生应该选择否定题干立场的角度来写。因此,为了激发大家的思考,下文冒天下之大不韪,完全赞同了题干的观点。

  Millions of people every year from some corners of the world migrate to metropolis in order to share more social resources like better schools for their children and more working opportunities for themselves. Obviously, what those immigrants ignore is threats for their health that they have to face there.

  开头段,背景描述之后,就是直接的点明了笔者立场。

  Primarily, big cities are more likely to suffer from environmental pollution, and hence contaminated living environment in large cities is destroying citizens’ health there. Both polluted underground water system and unbearable air quality cannot guarantee the local to have a safe living environment. Instead, in some relatively undeveloped areas people usually do not need to worry whether they should wear masks all the day or whether the water they drink every day is really drinkable or not. Besides, noise from transport in cities is another significant pollutant plaguing people living there especially at night. It is perceived as needles to prick people’s ears all the night. Living under circumstance like this, people are extremely far away from owning a healthy life.

  主段一,从环境污染方面入手,说明在大城市生活的人们的健康状况堪忧。

  Worse still, living in great tense is ruining health of residents in large cities both physically and mentally. Due to the unbelievably high living cost in big cities, those city dwellers must work hard to earn enough money to support their families. Workplace competition and widespread overtime work might bring employees huge pressure, which without a hitch makes them nervous and anxious day and night. Surviving with so much stress, people will consequently suffer from many kinds of disease like insomnia and high blood pressure. A growing number of mid-age people in cities come down with some illness that only old people could get in the past time, meaning that health conditions there are declining year by year.

  第二段,从精神压力入手,论证了巨大的压力使得人们的身体健康以及精神健康都在遭受威胁。

  Briefly, dangers to health of residents in large cities can be attributed to polluted environment and mental stress bothering people in cities almost every day, despite plenty of convenience and comfort that they can enjoy there. Therefore, health conditions of people living in big cities are definitely under threats.

  结尾段总括全文之后,再次表明了笔者的立场。

  此文,只为告诉各位烤鸭其实大作文的任何一题都有无数种解法。备考阶段应该多多思考,寻求一个适合自己的解题之道。

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